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Rhyme and Reason Gwyneth Box
NB: The author is British and has based her comments about
pronunciation on her own way of speaking. If your accent differs, you should
still find the comments useful, but may need to make adjustments. Recently, I've seen a lot of comment about rhyme and rhythm in
poetry, and would like to contribute my two pennyworth to the debate.
Most people would accept that modern poetry frequently doesn't have the
same rigid structure as the poems they learned by heart in school but
there are differences of opinion about whether this is a good or bad thing.
The perspectives range from those people who believe that anything not
written in iambic pentameter with full end-rhymes (definitions later)
isn't poetry, to those who feel that because recognised poets write in
free verse without obvious form and structure 'anything goes'.
Perhaps it is this latter attitude that has most alienated the lovers
of traditional poetry: they see text laid out as poetry but cannot recognise
the patterns they are used to. But prose does not become poetry by simply
changing its layout on the page, and, although not as obtrusive as in
the past, rhyme and rhythm are two of the most important aspects of a
text that mark it as poetry not prose.
Firstly, let's look at rhyme. We'll start with a few definitions:
The traditional type of rhyme, occuring on the last word or words of
the line, is end-rhyme. Robert Louis Stevenson uses this in 'From
a Railway Carriage':
Faster than fairies, faster than witches, In fact here we can see two types of end-rhyme: plain and rain
are masculine rhymes, strong, single-syllable rhymes that carry
the final stress of the line, whereas witches and ditches
are feminine rhymes: the final syllable of the line is unstressed
and the rhyme needs to occur in the penultimate syllable as well.
Of course it is possible to find words which rhyme in more than two syllables,
humorous and numerous for example, but this can begin to
obtrude too much, particularly if the poem deals with a serious subject.
Although the above examples are full rhymes, Stevenson does include two
couplets with half-rhymes (also known as slant rhyme or
imperfect rhyme) in the poem:
Here is a tramp who stands and gazes; and
And here is a mill, and there is a river: The last (unstressed) syllables of gazes and daisies are
not identical, but are close enough not to grate on the ear, especially
not when the poem is read at the galloping pace that it deserves. Personally,
the rhyming of river and ever bothers me more, as the discrepancy
occurs on the stressed syllables and, indeed, the last couplet of the
poem. Even so, the fact is that the poem does use end-rhymes throughout.
Rhymes don't always have to occur at the ends of lines. Take this verse
from Jabberwocky by Lewis Carroll:
One, two! One, two! and through and through As well as the end-rhyme of the second and last lines, we have internal
rhymes in the first and third line pairs two and through,
and dead and head.
Another tool in rhyming poetry is assonance - memorably described
by the Julie Waters character in Educating Rita as 'getting the rhyme
wrong'. Here the stressed vowel sounds are the same, although the consonant
sounds differ. The words gathering and brambles in the Stevenson
poem both use the short A sound, as do tramp and stands
which occur in the next line.
Pairs like home and phone, or syllable and miracle,
are assonant rather than rhyming, but their use together is perfectly
valid. This can either occur at line ends or within the line.
There's also consonance, which is like assonance, only with the
consonant sounds the same. Words like paper, pauper, piper
and popery would come into this category, as do many onomatopoeic
expressions like snicker-snack, flip-flop and prittle-prattle.
Alliteration is another similar technique; it consists of repeating
the consonant sounds at the start of words or stressed syllables. We can
see its use in the second line of this couplet from Stevenson's poem:
Here is a cart run away in the road Sometimes I have seen comments about rhyming poetry that only
admit the concept of full end-rhymes and discount half-rhymes, assonance
etc. This, I feel, is a very limited and limiting perspective.
Perhaps one of the most dangerous aspects of writing this kind of rhymed
poetry is the need to twist the word order to make the rhyme come in the
right place. The same is true of strict metre (see below). Language use
has changed and continues to do so; what was acceptable, and indeed admirable,
in the past is just not natural in the twenty-first century. Consider
these lines from Robert Herrick's poem, To Daffodils:
Stay, stay, We will go with you along is contrived, and would hardly pass
muster in a modern work, although many would consider Herrick's poem a
classic.
Another problem with strict rhyme is the temptation to change a word
to make rhyming it easier. Take, for example, a poem about your pet. If
you're a cat-lover, you won't have much trouble in finding words to rhyme
with cat. If your pet is a dog, however, life is tougher.
It's very tempting to turn him into a hound or a mutt to
make things easier, but is it valid? If we're joking we do sometimes use
more formal vocabulary: mother becomes mater, washing
becomes ablution, we wend our way and so on. But, outside
the comic, each of these expressions has a connotation which we must remember:
calling your chihuahua a hound just won't work.
You may choose not to write traditional rhyming poetry, perhaps because
you see it as limiting, or perhaps you simply don't like it. Whatever
your reasons, think before you throw the baby out with the bathwater.
Don Paterson has said that 'rhyme always unifies sense. [...] it
can trick a logic from the shadows where one would not otherwise have
existed'.
Even a non-rhyming poem can, and perhaps should, make use of the some
of the elements we have seen above. By choosing words with similar sounds
- alliteration, half-rhymes, assonance and consonance - you can give your
poetry a coherence which it would otherwise lack.
Now it's time to turn to metre. Again we'll start with
a few definitions:
Word length can be measured in syllables. This refers to how a
word is pronounced, not how it is written. Cat and catch
both have one syllable. Safe is also monosyllabic, but cafe
has two syllables. (That's why it is also written café -
to show that the final e is to be pronounced.)
Any word in English with more than one syllable will have at least one
stressed (emphasised) syllable. Water and pronounce
are both two-syllable words, but their stress pattern is not the same:
water is stressed on the first syllable, pronounce on the
second.
Sometimes the stress moves according to the context of a word. Consider
the word cigarette. It has three syllables, but where is the stress?
At the beginning or at the end? If we say the word out of context, we
probably stress the last syllable, but in the phrase 'a packet of cigarettes'
many people will emphasise the first syllable.
Sometimes the stress pattern gives us information which we might have
gleaned from written clues if we were reading. In the sentence 'Look
at that blackbird!' if we are referring to the specific bird, Turdus
Merula, called a blackbird (one word), the stress is on the word black;
if we mean a bird which is black, but of unknown or unspecified species,
(written as two words), we will stress both black and bird.
In fact, talking about syllables is only of limited use to us as English
is what is called a stress-timed language. This means that different
syllables take different lengths of time to say. Compare the phrases 'Go
home' and 'I'm going home'. The first has two syllables and
two stresses. It takes two 'beats' to say. The second has four syllables
and two or three stresses depending on meaning. If it's a simple statement,
perhaps in answer to the question 'Where are you going?', the stresses
will fall on the first syllable of going and on the word home.
The time taken to say the complete sentence will be the same as to simply
say 'Go home'. If we emphasise the word I, as in 'You can
do as you like, but I'm going home!' there will be an additional stress,
and the phrase will take longer to say.
One last point about syllables and stresses is to mention the schwa
sound. This sound corresponds to no single vowel, but occurs in many unstressed
syllables. In fact it's one of the keys to speaking English like a native.
If we couldn't make this sound we wouldn't be able to cram so many syllables
into such a short time. It's a sort of relaxed, short grunt. It occurs
in the final syllable of the words water, direction and
infinite; in the first syllable of pronounce, attempt
and suppose; it's the middle syllable of poetry, emphasis
and currently. Sometimes it's used twice in the same word. In America,
for example, it's there at the beginning and the end.
Sometimes a word will be pronounced with a schwa by some people, but
that same syllable will disappear completely for others. The word different,
for example. Does it have two or three syllables? Consider words like
paddling, offering, shortening; do you pronounce
the middle syllable? And what about words like wild and fire?
Are they single syllables?
All of this is quite theoretical and you won't find it mentioned very
often in books about writing as it's really from the point of view of
phonology rather than literature. Despite this, it's useful background.
If you begin to listen to how people speak, you stand a better chance
of writing poetry that has natural rhythm.
We do need a few literary terms for metre, too. So let's start with foot
- a unit of rhythm.
The first two lines of Lewis Carroll's Jabberwocky are written in iambic
tetrameter: That means they have four feet (tetrameter) and the stress
alternates between weak and strong (iambic).
'Twas brillig, and the slithy toves The iambic metre or rising rhythm is the most common in English
verse; it gives a di-dum di-dum effect, each di-dum being a foot. Five
feet give us a pentameter. Shakespeare wrote his plays in unrhymed
iambic pentameters (blank verse).
Of course you could start the line with a stressed sound and have dum-di
(falling) rhythm. That would be trochaic metre. The start
of John Donne's Song gives us an example:
Go, and catch a falling star, Notice that we have an odd number of syllables here - the final weak
stress is omitted in both lines. The technical term for this type of line
is catalectic.
There are, of course, other types of rhythm which rely on other combinations
of stressed and non-stressed sounds. Thomas Hood's Bridge of Sighs, for
example, starts with the verse:
One more Unfortunate Here we have one strong beat followed by two weak - a dactyl foot
- although on the second and fourth lines the final weak sounds are omitted.
As this is only intended to be an introduction to metre, I shan't continue
with more examples; this should have given you an idea of what metre is
about.
There is a strong temptation when writing in a fixed metre to insert
extra words or to change the words simply to maintain the rhythm. Neither
of these is really the solution. Suppose you want to use the word cat,
but need two beats. You could substitute feline if it's in a falling
foot, but here you have the same problem of connotation and register that
I mentioned when dealing with rhyme. Sometimes it will be appropriate,
or with the help of a thesaurus you will find a suitable word with the
right level of formality (tabby, perhaps?) but all too often the
result will be contrived, and you'll be talking of dwellings not
homes, fauna not animals and volumes instead
of books. Which isn't to say that dwellings, fauna and volumes
don't have a place. They do, but not simply to keep your rhythm pattern
straight.
Another tempting insertion is the padding word. We have many verbs in
English that can be followed by a preposition or adverb without changing
the essential meaning. Eat and eat up are not radically
different, nor are cut and cut up although the down
in cut down does make slightly more difference to meaning. If you
constantly included these extra words to force the rhythm to work, you
are actually closer to playing a word game than to writing poetry.
The section above about syllable compression and the schwa sound gives
another reason why insertion of words is not always a good idea. Compare
the phrases
I've got a cat.
and
And I have got a cat.
In the first we have four syllables and two beats, the second six syllables,
but still only two beats in normal speech. If we make the reader say it
as six beats or three iambic feet, to fit in with the rhythm, the result
will be so unnatural that the poem will seem forced.
Earlier on, included The Bridge of Sighs because it's a good example
of how a tragic subject can become almost risible if written in heavily
structured verse. Personally I love the poem, but it doesn't make me feel
the tragedy of the suicide. Many traditional poems are hard to read seriously
because of their constant rhythm and rhyme which create an unintentional
comic effect which detracts from the subject. This is one reason for choosing
not to adhere to a strict rhyme and rhythm scheme.
You may find that instead of following an exact formal metre, you can
use different rhythmical patterns to create tension and interest for the
reader. This technique is used even in old poems, for example use of a
falling foot at the start of an otherwise iambic line is quite common.
Alternatively, you may choose to write in free verse, which doesn't
confrom to a regular rhythm structure.
The fact that many modern poets do write in free verse doesn't mean that
they don't know what metre is, nor that they chop up the lines at random!
We have already seen that rhyme is not simply about 'the cat sat on the
mat' type combinations and rhythm, too, is a more complex subject than
it seems at first. Even free verse may contain passages of traditional
metre.
Each new poem offers you the opportunity to make a conscious decision
about the form you are going to use. The same subject can change radically
when dealt with in a different way. It is all too easy to think that abandoning
formal structure gives you more freedom to express yourself when in fact
you may find the discipline imposed by a formal meter and rhyme structure
may bring out aspects of your writing that you weren't aware of.
Coleridge defined 'prose' as 'words in their best order, and 'poetry'
as 'the best words in the best order'. This definition neither demands
nor excludes the use of rhyme and rhythm. Instead, it suggests that from
among the hundreds of possible combinations of words which convey an idea
there is one phrase which is better than the others. The poet's task is
to find that phrase.
One last comment: it's worth remembering that poetry needs to be read out loud to be fully appreciated. Although you hear the sounds in your head when you read silently, there is a tendency to skimp on concentration and assume things about the sounds, which are quite different in reality. Problems with rhythm and sound combinations are best resolved by reading and seeing whether you trip up on any part of the piece. That, of course, is from the writer's point of view. For the poetry reader, I still recommend reading out loud: it's the best way to enjoy the sounds and understand what the poet was trying to say. |
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